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All right see shmoop er's another elusive eleven for you

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This is going to be really exciting John troubles declaration

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of independence that's what we're reading here and before you

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start in the first question of the siri's we're going

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to just kind of skim it pick out a few

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key words here painting is a decoration of anything that

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you can take a moment and think about what you're

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gonna say kind of congress painting jefferson with authors like

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john hancock and manage for millions of people really going

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to use that photo was like looking at everything going

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on under article three large okay well let's get down

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to it is the same format as we've had before

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The underlying words is what we're being asked about and

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we're going to figure out if we need to change

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him or not So the first one is shown placing

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the document will not great writing it's passive there is

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shown as opposed to shows but let's just go re

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read this puppy again here don't you think it's time

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to take a moment to give you something for the

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defense will present to the second annual congress and something

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comes from a lot of decoration is showing placing the

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document before john hancock president congress All right well he's

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shown placing the document what's wrong with that sounds pretty

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good to me Well let's think about this to maintain

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the verb tense structure in the surrounding paragraphs The sentence

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needs a regular present tense active verb like places and

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that's which not only makes the sentence more stylistically consistent

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but it also avoids the weak passive voice right like

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he's placing or was placing or places like that well

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with sentence in the passive voice the actions less immediate

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So it ain't that the passive voice also makes the

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sentence stand out from the others that described the action

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of the painting while is placing isn't in the passive

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voice it's still an indirect and unnecessarily worthy way of

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phrasing the sentence and it breaks with a sense pattern

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in paragraph no they probably you did talk like that

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in them thar days it's true that jefferson did the

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placing in the past But when describing the action of

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the painting as in the other senses go ahead and

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stick to the present tense So don't change a thing

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The answer is b

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