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Thank you We sneak in and here's your shmoop du

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jour brought to you by damaged organs which can make

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take me out to the ballgame Greeting experience for all

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No All right Music for your skimming pleasure Sure you

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enjoyed that beyonce All right what is the best way

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to revise sentences Eleven and twelve so that they are

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less choppy and ineffective and hear the angel answers kidneys

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Okay so let's start by taking a good look att

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sentences in question and yep there Choppy All right Both

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of these senses air kind of short And since they're

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similar in structure and content well we might as well

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go ahead and squishing get they might want a little

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elbow room but they pay for first class Option d

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is grammatically incorrect making it the worst option of the

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bunch if we have a cynical and connecting two independent

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clauses Well there's no need for the conjunction but here

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we have a case of two cents elements trying to

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do the same job It's just come down from upper

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management so yeah no more redundancy Yeah Garcia's awkwardly phrase

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which jumbles the meaning of the original sentences This version

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makes it sound like the chemicals damage the brain by

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affecting the liver and kidneys Sure faulty liver and kidneys

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do eventually wreak havoc on the brain But that's not

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The point the author trying to make here dramatically option

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b is technically well a correct We've got two independent

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clauses connected by a semicolon there's Nothing wrong on that

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front Trouble is that the whole thing's still sounds really

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choppy Thiss option is basically the same thing Is the

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original just with a semicolon shoved in between the two

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sentences Yeah we want these senses to get a little

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closer but quite close option is the best Answer the

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comma and coordinating conjunction Connect the sentences in a way

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that's grammatically correct and the conjunction and gives just the

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right amount of breathing room to help us go from

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one sentence to another in comfort It might not be 00:02:06.34 --> [endTime] first class but it's better No

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