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All right writing shmoop er's last question this whole siri's

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but you're going to miss us not at all to

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conclude the essay effectively The author is considering adding this

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sentence at the end of the essay should the sentence

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be added the treasury board of three commissioners continued to

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oversee the finances of the conf federation of former colonies

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until september seventeen eighty nine when congress officially established department

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of the treasury that still exist today Well what do

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you think Yes or no kind of thumbs up Thumbs

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down on this would come at the end of the

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essay does kind of have some punch to it Yeah

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sort of summarizes things and well the essay is called

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the beginnings of the treasury and that's important because conclusions

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like to be circular So you always ask yourself what's

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the title of something when you think about what the

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last sentence should be and that's if you're lost and

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totally clueless on these kind of questions that's probably the

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first thing you ought to ask yourselves what's the title

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and then how do i kind of keep it Well

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but after the first sentence today's modern treasury also known

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as the department of the treasury has never mentioned only

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its predecessors are So this new sentence fixes that by

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wrapping up the narrative and pointing directly to the founding

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of the department of treasury Yeah they don't mention hamilton

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here though nor any of the singing they should Well

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okay so that's it loser bowl Well there's no specific

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or even implied question contained in the new sentence so

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get rid of me That was wrong but what we're

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left pondering is what we've been pondering the whole time

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How could the country have been so bad with money

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The purpose of the essay is to explain how the

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department of treasury came to be which is exactly the

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information contained in the new sentenced it's True that the

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department of the treasury named in this new last sense

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is the same one we have today but the sentence

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keeps the action in the past So bub i d

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and all the others answers a yes because it supports

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the purpose of the essay and completes the narrative and

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completes this whole essay writing section Thank you very much 00:01:58.406 --> [endTime] Good night

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