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Which of the following revisions best combines sentences 12 and 13?


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All right kiss i reading shmoop proves this is four

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out of five here and then we're done with this

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awesome section Yeah right Go to the question Here in

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context with following revisions Best combined senses twelve and thirteen

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So rut revisions mashes these uh pinto one rambling sentence

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Here we go So many parents and students will be

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concerned about fast food nutrition There is actually nothing to

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fear Okay we're going to mash thes and well think

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about this We don't want that period there We want

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some kind of connective device Ah think about semicolon No

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Maybe a comma and get him dash thing Maybe a

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colon there something What do we think Well there may

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be a slight oxymoron in the phrase fast food nutrition

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You know they're sort of opposite but we're going to

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let that one slide For now This was written by

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the fast food association of america Combining sentences has toe

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work much like the seeming contradictions of an oxymoron It

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has to make sense Is ah hole while maintaining its

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equal parts right Think jumbo shrimp that's like a opposites

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attract thing there Yeah the best way to separate these

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Two independent clauses is to change one of them Tio

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be a dependent clause by adding in the subordinating conjunction

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While this provides some contrast between the two ideas and

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helps the reader transition smoothly the sentence still has to

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make sense though you know we need to make sure

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that the dependent clause with weill is up front followed

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by a comma and then the independent claws right So

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the answer here is sea While many parents and students

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will be concerned about fast food nutrition come there's actually

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nothing to fear but fear itself and calories in fact

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and salt in the high blood pressure in obesity and 00:01:53.705 --> [endTime] the diabetes All right bowl stop

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