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TSI Writing: Which Revision Best Supports the Author's Claim? 4 Views


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Which of the following revisions could be made to support the author's claim in sentence 2?


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Okay sy reading shmoop furs We got a long passage

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here We're going to read as only rhetorical effectiveness and

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use of organization that's what they're testing you on here

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So the way i read these things that were going

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to skim the first sentence and then pick out key

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words sort of like this consumes really fast but i'm

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like she's very private lunch kind of scream they're they're

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Uh well if it's about fast food can they really

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there's a tonal thing here Like they're being a bit

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snarky And then what kind of cruise down the first

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sentence and excellent or now it's going down I'm going

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down by a customer each day and we kind of

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doing there's taani and kids are picky customers People are

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whining about kids food appetite stuff right Many parents and

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concerned about fast food nutrition way skim there any key

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words that stick out nutrition isn't nutritious repeated so that's

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a big red flashing light there when they repeat a

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word All right the next one too many tools news

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you're suffering budget cuts like proper funding one way to

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coming and taking revenue through school lunches that's where they're

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gonna profit off of student lunches All right well in

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the last paragraph In incorporating fast choices many love above

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All right so let's go to the first question right

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here in context which of the following revisions could be

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made to support the authors claim and sentenced to do

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no it's let's cruise They're sentenced to write their some

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fast food restaurants and high schools are forming partnerships at

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an alarming rate Okay so like mcdonald's and union high

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school what does that mean All right so what does

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that mean While the authors claim is the most important

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piece of an essay we love ourselves some fast food

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but what's even better than a burger and fries is

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a solid claim with support We were paid to say

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that art stating i gives large fries and a milkshake

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alright stating that high schools and fast food chains air

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forming partnerships quote at an alarming rate unquote is not

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on our authors claim menu stating that this is happening

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quote at an alarming rate unquote indicates the author isn't

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on board with this decision even though the rest of

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his paper indicates that he's supportive of it changing this

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to benefit students provides the right kind of claim for

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the support and evidence in the paper got it so

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change at an alarming rate which like he doesn't like

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the deal So to benefit students which says oh he

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does fast food and our schools they'll have a sleep

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coma across the country at around one o'clock All right

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so loser bowl here the ones we don't want one

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we reject well high schools aren't quite turning into mcdonald's

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yet so get rid of a Nor these changes happening

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in elementary schools to be there There's also no evidence

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in the passenger that suggests every fast food chain is

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jumping on this ship So get rid of seek So

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you have The answer is b way are

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