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Check out this PSAT Writing Diagnostic question and determine whether the sentence in question is fine as is, or needs a change.
PSAT 1.18 Writing Narrative Walkthrough. How would you change the underlined portion, if at all?
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Check out this PSAT Writing Diagnostic question and determine whether the sentence in question is fine as is, or needs a change.
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- 00:02
And here's your shmoop du jour brought to you by rock art a true [Cavemen sitting beside rock art]
- 00:06
necessity if you have any intention of classing up your cave alright check out
- 00:11
this passage...
- 00:28
alright how would you change
- 00:29
the below underlined portion of the passage if at all not cool and here the
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- 00:35
not cool the perfect thing to call someone who is not going with the flow [Man on fire]
- 00:40
or the human torch okay if you happen to know him well which we do and in all
- 00:45
honesty he's pretty fantastic alright time to check out the passage to see how [Man reading a book]
- 00:49
this one is being used he said he did it because he thought it would be cool and
- 00:54
he pleaded guilty to one felony violation of the act and paid a hefty
- 00:58
fine in restitution not cool seems like Gainey's future is [Ganey standing in street and police officer appears]
- 01:04
so bright he's got to wear handcuffs not school indeed well let's check out the
- 01:09
answer choices and see if there's a better way to go here should it be
- 01:12
changed to cool while not shockingly cool is the complete opposite of not
- 01:18
cool so we're doing quite the 180 here but really having to pay a hefty fine is [Man pays fine to officer]
- 01:23
cool well it might work if we're being just plain sarcastic but sarcasm has a
- 01:28
tendency to miss the mark when it appears only in right see some of our [Girl reading books]
- 01:32
study guides for reference we're gonna go ahead and rule that be
- 01:35
how about Cena unforgivable what is this well it seems a bit heavy-handed for [Man performing bicep curls]
- 01:42
this paragraph and probably more something our grandmother might say as
- 01:46
she shakes her head and rolls her eyeballs back into her skull in her day
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vandals ask permission before defacing art so alright well no got to be [Boy with spray paint]
- 01:55
something better than this one beep not cool man
- 01:59
okay now we're going the complete opposite of our Grammy [Grandma reading]
- 02:03
this is way too informal and not in sync with the rest of the passage you can't
- 02:07
really see this author saying it in fact we can't really see this author [Author hiding behind curtain]
- 02:11
at all let me show himself with Lizzy hiding
- 02:14
alright well if it's none of those three then the sentence must have been fine to
- 02:19
begin with yeah by saying not cool the author is using the vandals own words
- 02:23
against him insinuating that while he may have thought it would be cool to [Man drawing on wall]
- 02:27
carve up some priceless art the punishment handed out as a result of his
- 02:31
behavior was most certainly not cool course in our book no there's no one to [Man standing behind bars]
- 02:37
live in our granny you ever seen her cook up a bowl of our favorite matzo [Grandma cooking matzo ball soup]
- 02:41
ball soup that girl is on fire
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