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PSAT 1.18 Writing Diagnostic. How would you change the underlined portion of the passage, if at all?

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Thank you We sneak And here's your shmoop usually brought

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to you by trumping behavior which is typified by being

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loud self absorbed and obnoxious Then again it just might

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get you your own television show All right check out

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the passage Rock art and vandalism Here we go man

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How many times we read this All right we're going

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to skip skip skip rock water and here we go

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How would you change The bolo underlined portion of the

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passage If it all they're gone forever and they are

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not making more And here the pencil answers You don't

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scare us like that for a second we thought they

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were talking about ben and jerry's Cookie core ice cream

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They took that away from us We're not sure what

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we do because usually when we're depressed we cookie core

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ice cream It's like we have what is quite warm

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All right so let's check out the passenger and see

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what he's gone forever To some this may seem a

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bit heavy handed but to those of us who watch

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these priceless gems disappear from the landscape due to carelessness

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it is deeply heartbreaking They are gone forever and they

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are not making more Okay so we may need to

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read a little bit of what precedes this sentence Figure

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out exactly What's being reference frays priceless gems But since

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we read this faster three times already fortunately we know

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they're talking about panels of rock art This question once

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anoke the phrasing used in the last part of the

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senses could go Or if it means a complete makeover

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Well the problem with the existing sentences that it has

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a pronoun issue Check out the repeated use of the

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word they the first time it's used it's referring to

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the pieces of rock art themselves and the second time

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it's referring to the original artist And yes switching that

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mid sentence is a big no no can get very

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confusing Well how do you like this sense They picked

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up three gowns of milk at the store but they

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were all in expired so they took them back But

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they wouldn't refund their money which they still had in

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the cash register But they were counterfeit anyway that we

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rest our case is be a better option They are

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gone forever They are not making more No changing the

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punctuation doesn't resolve are they Problem So they can take

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a hike We're gonna need to be How about you

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Well they will never make more of them on ly

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one they but now we're throwing them into the mix

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Well this one is cleverly disguised as an improvement but

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it's really no better The pronounced being used are still

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vague While we might be able to guess what they

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pronounce are referring to it isn't explicitly clear The web

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sentences worded so sees out as well leaving people they

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are gone forever and no more will be made the

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first part of the sentence was referring to the rock

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art and there's Nothing here that changes it up They

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the panels of rock art are gone forever and no

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more rock art will be made It's clear it's consistent

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and in this case it will get us credit for

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the correct answer So deity is in honor of prehistoric

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man Ben and jerry have just announced their newest flavor 00:03:10.62 --> [endTime] rocky art road They can't all be winners

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