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Okay sy writing smokers got another whole paragraphs set for

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you This one's focusing on coherence organization and word choice

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that we don't have any of those skills here So

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we're going to skin this thing member We read the

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first sentence and then skin for key words and then

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we'll pray a lot Ok so here we go If

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there's one thing to live in a stress yeah we're

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skimming economy three hundred billion years get managing stress is

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in our ability identified causes on do that key words

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here mental healthy a long time managing stress whether short

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or long term can depend upon the source of the

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factors Stress your blah blah blah triggers personal values a

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job understanding leblon needy children all those chills All right

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Well the impact stress under your life only unique inviolable

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Have tea with all right no keywords there While we

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cannot always change or eliminate that things that trigger stress

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in our lives we can make a conscious effort to

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change our behavior in response Okay All right Good enough

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let's Just go to the first question here and think

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you don't usually costs extra in context Which of the

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following could provide additional support for the thesis of the

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passage if inserted after sentence once Okay so we got

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sense one right there If there is one aspect Of

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life that affects all of us it's stressed and then

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they go on to safe stress can also have a

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negative financial effect So what would you add after one

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to make that person more powerful Well let's think about

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this Oh yeah thesis has fallen and it can't get

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up without proper support claims Well they just seem to

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wilt like that essay begins with a nice introduction but

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the paragraph in general is really weak It needs some

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beefing up by inserting a sense that explains the problems

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related distress while we can add some muscle to this

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flimsy paragraph So this one right here d does the

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trick Stress can lead to a wide variety of health

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conditions including headaches sleep problems uncharacteristic anger anxiety and even

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depression see that way they're throwing in all these images

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and things that you know and can relate teo and

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probably school on that kind of beef it up and

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make it more powerful Then it flows naturally so that

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sentence to gives the you know kind of counter stuff

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It can also have negative financial effect on top of

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everything else That's a vicious cycle the others don't Work

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well what we don't need is a wimpy generalization that

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doesn't pack enough info to get us going to get

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rid of a And we also don't need information that

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goes off topic and start spouting off some sci fi

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stuff about stress that it's not really proven here So

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be get rid of And finally a mediocre choice would

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be adding mohr tow what's already been said and sense

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One c just adds kind of more uh and we

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don't really want to just be average We want to

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pump up this paragraph you know like that So he

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is the answer and that said we're not going to 00:02:57.458 --> [endTime] stress about being from up here Oh

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