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Thank you We sneak in and here's your shmoop dooz

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your brought to you by the laws of the land

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because only fish care about the laws of the sea

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Check the following passage Disenfranchise fallon's all those poor fallon's

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You gotta be able to vote They're gonna vote for

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oh belen booth politician All right Well which of these

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changes would improve jordan's paper And here the potential answers

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choices But do you know anything Anything All right Well

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we have several very different options here So the only

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thing to do is take them one by one and

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see if they have anything useful to say Our gas

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is Three of them do not But that's just a

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hunch choice A would be an awesome thing to do

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If our goal were to turn the whole paper into

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gobbledygook The fourth paragraph is doing just fine where it

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is ripping it out and slapping it on the end

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would well totally disrupt the papers Flow and like serious

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emcee jordan's paper gets picked when its flow is interrupted

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Option b is also a really bad idea The final

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paragraph would make a terrible introductory paragraph because the things

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that mentions have to be introduced before they're discussed in

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detail This is the kind of edit that makes readers

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go huh Okay now we're down Two choices Dnc option

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d says that jordan needs to ditch sentence twenty two

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while see claims that sentence eleven is the issue Well

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let's take a look At both these senses to see

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which one the paper can do without Well after much

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deliberation well after five seconds of deliberation we have decided

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to eliminate choice D Sentence twenty two gives us some

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important statistics on the numbers of disenfranchised felons in america

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While sense eleven gives us some random vague info about

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how all american citizens are affected by the law Joyce

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c is correct Sense Elevens gotta go Sometimes dis in

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french mint is okay Just imagine if we've given the 00:01:53.52 --> [endTime] other choices A vote

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