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Thank you We sneak in and here's your shmoop du

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jour Brought to you by gas guzzlers Kanye says people

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who drive them our fossil foods can you she's a

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really clever right She works for shmoop but you didn't

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know that we're still skimming and blame big corporations When

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in doubt just do that Bite the hand that feeds

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your people on by smaller car bomb a block Damnation

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All right Tony wants to add a sentence at the

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end of the second paragraph to help conclude the paragraph

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Which of the following would be the best since toe

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Add and hear the potential answers All right what's going

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to make that second paragraph stronger All right Well let's

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review it this way We'll have a good idea of

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what the end is missing Here we go The single

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biggest contributing factor to air pollution is car transportation which

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produces carbon dioxide Also the more we drive the more

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pollution we produce plus bigger cars use more gasoline which

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means more carbon dioxide There are decisions we can make

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to reduce our environmental impact in our transportation For example

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we can choose to live closer to where we work

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Another example is that we can choose to take public

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transportation like buses and trains whenever possible we can choose

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to buy smaller more gas efficient cars Okay so main

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problem is that the paragraph sort of randomly stops it's

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like kanye stopped in the middle of her Yes he

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isn't that annoying All right wilby isn't going to work

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because it sets up the third paragraph without closing the

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second way can't skip second base to get to third

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right That kind of stuff doesn't play baseball either and

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it doesn't work in essays we can nick see because

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it takes the paragraph in a new direction It might

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work for releasing some of tanya's pick up reed for

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people who drive gas guzzlers but it doesn't do a

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thing for her essay We're starting to get there with

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choice d it does sort of sum the paragraph The

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problem is that it's a little too General tanya needs

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something more specific that directly ties in with her thesis

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Answer a is just what tanya needs here It wraps

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up the paragraph in connects directly to tunney's thesis about

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how we can all do things that help the environment

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We tried to aid the environment by helping it to

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revise an essay but didn't seem all that grateful Sorry 00:02:15.073 --> [endTime] environment Just trying to do our part

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