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Thank you We sneak in and here's your shmoop du

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jour brought to you by applying to colleges Wouldn't it

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be so much easier if they just use the sorting

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hat Yeah remember that thing from harry potter Alright check

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the following passage and i think fans a slithering around

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here a griffin door whatever they want Evil Good good

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Evil knows All right maria would like to revise sense

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eleven Right there That sense Eleven to create a smoother

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transition from the second to the third paragraphs Which of

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the following is the best revision and hear the pinch

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lancers All right i see myself after believing pirate Well

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you certainly has the narcissism of doctors Okay here we

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go So what we need here is a sense that

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transitions are smoothly from the info on maria's future residency

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to the paragraph about maria's post residency career plans How

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hard could that be Well it's not so easy for

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option A chain myself working in a clinic first again

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experience and then started my own private practice It's our

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dick cheney impression there woody All right well this one

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jumps right into the post residency stuff without any mention

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of the residency way too eager to leave the past

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behind much like maria will probably be when she leaves

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home for college Yeah we've been their choice D doesn't

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mention the residency Either you work in a clinic First

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would be the best way for me to gain strains

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have residency and then it will start My own private

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practice Come on Choices Didn't the last paragraph mean anything

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to you All right Hey look a choice See Right

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here Plan I finished my residency I would want to

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start my own bar private buffer zone wearing clinic experience

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Well it actually manages to mention the residency so we're

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good on that front We get in trouble though is

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the sentence goes along Check out how the order of

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events is a chronological jumble like that The sentence will

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be a lot clearer if maria talks about the clinic

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first and then the private practice Well choice b shows

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the rest How it's After completing my residency i see

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myself working in a clinic to get experience and and

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started my own private practice There we go It begins

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with a clear link to the residency info and gives

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us the rest of maria's plans in the order that

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they occur Got it alright as long as maria doesn't

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ditch med school to be a circus clown or something 00:02:17.34 --> [endTime] else she's in good shape

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