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Thank you We sneak in and here's your shmoop too

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sure brought to you by the navy Good thing walter

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didn't know karate He might have lost the top of

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his head with the first salute That can happen I

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check out the following passage on we're reading skimming in

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hero nineteen Twenty a small fire mode Okay what's The

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most effective revision to make in sentence seven and hear

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the potential answers You mean all right Well so the

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original sense gives us two key pieces of info Walter

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received several important medals of honor during world war two

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and he served in the navy from nineteen Forty one

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in nineteen Forty five Awesome but there's problem here with

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the order of information it makes way more sense to

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say that walter was in the navy and then to

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bring up the part about the medals of honor Otherwise

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we're left wondering for a hot sec where walter got

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the medals like magic claw machine or maybe ebay He

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does the same thing as the original sense but it

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tries to look cooler by using a semicolon correctly that

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an emoji for winking well sorry b were not impressed

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Here the order of information is the most important thing

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Yeah he makes the same mistake all over again Look

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seriously we need some context before we start talking about

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these medals of honor If walter's mom had just given

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him some medals of honor all she made from bottle

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caps while that wouldn't be too impressive now what Yeah

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option c finally gets the order of information right but

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then it gives us some seriously long qi phrasing so

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there will be no medals of honor for this Joyce

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Well a's the best answer First we hear about walter

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joining the navy and then we hear about those medals

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of honor If we want a medal of honor well

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wear a t shirt with a picture of us wearing

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the medal of honor and then we probably wear the

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medal of honor on top of that shirt Too much 00:01:44.206 --> [endTime] Forget it you still do it

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